swiftsnowmane: (Vaderkin - Twilight of the Apprentice)
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Father,
 
I may be falling
through clouded skies,
broken
and bloodied,
weighted
with the horror
of unholy revelation,
but it is you
who fell long ago
from far greater heights.
 
Father, 
 
you may be standing
against the faded stars,
shackled
and suffering,
bowed
beneath the burden
of long-held darkness,
but it is I
who blaze
with undimmed light.
 
Let go
of your hate,
Let go
of your fear,
Let go
of your shrouded lies,
and I promise –
 
I will be there
I will catch you
 
and together
we will find 
our own piece of sky.
 
 
 
t.f.b.c.

Date: 2017-04-20 09:07 pm (UTC)
cloudsinvenice: "everyone's mental health is a bit shit right now, so be gentle" (Default)
From: [personal profile] cloudsinvenice
This is powerful. I love that despite everything, he's still reaching out a hand.

Date: 2017-04-21 06:42 am (UTC)
awinterbornrose: (Lady)
From: [personal profile] awinterbornrose
This is fantastic. Very powerful, well done!

Date: 2017-04-21 11:30 pm (UTC)
awinterbornrose: (Lady)
From: [personal profile] awinterbornrose
You're very welcome.

Date: 2017-04-21 07:43 am (UTC)
makamu: (Default)
From: [personal profile] makamu
Incredibly powerful use of imagery, which I really found captivating - thank you for this. And I have to say: your perspective and meta on the Skywalkers shifts the way I see all of these characters *a lot* And I love it!

Date: 2017-04-22 05:43 pm (UTC)
makamu: (Default)
From: [personal profile] makamu
Glad to be of service! But I tend to speak as I find, and your poem really is something else...

As for your meta: I have to admit that I never cared that much for Luke or Anakin as a child watching these films growing up. When it comes to the Skywalkers, I have always been a Leia person, and apart from that, my primary focus has always been the Jedi and the larger-scale issues with the Order and the Sith. There is one thing I love about the prequels (dialogue flaws and characterisation issues not withstanding): I think by the end everybody in the audience has grasped that the "more civilised age" Obi-Wan reminisces about on Tatooine never existed and the Order of the Jedi never were the good guys (although the Sith are without a doubt a heck of a lot worse) in any simplistic sense. But it took your meta to make me see just how fundamental Anakin's arc is to bringing about that realisation and that he did balance the Force in the end because he was both Jedi and Sith and at the very end transcended both...

Though I have one other question: how do you feel about George Lucas retcomning the Force ghosts at the end of RotJ? Thanks to my uncle, I saw an original version of the scene first, and the change baffled and angeed me when I finally about all the films on DVD eight years ago. It just makes no sense to me for young! Ani to be there - Luke certainly wouldn't know who he is! I am sorry if I am opening any wounds here, but I'd love to hear your take on this. Thanks in advance!

Date: 2017-04-23 01:55 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] makamu
Wow! Just...wow! Thank you for the detailed response (which makes a bucketload of sense). I am sorry I cannot reply as this deserves to be replied to right now (RL), but I'll try to do so as soon as I can (Wednesday probably). I hope that is all right with you. And again, thank you for taking the time to write this.

Date: 2017-04-21 02:53 pm (UTC)
From: [personal profile] kaoriva
This is beautiful!!! The Anakin/Luke relationship is my favorite in all the saga and you captured Luke's feelings perfectly, his determination and resolution in saving his father from the Dark Side...feels. So lovely! <3

Date: 2017-04-22 02:01 am (UTC)
From: [personal profile] kaoriva
Same! I love it a lot too <3

Date: 2017-04-21 03:42 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] earthspirits
Beautiful and very evocative.

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